It’s extremely cliche as it is not. He starts left, rainbows over the top to the right (deliberately NOT looking where he should) and magically sees his target ‘dead-ahead’.
You can make this even more interesting by changing his path, adding some noise and hesitations into it. I’d even suggest getting rid of the full movement on the right. IE, Have him sniff left then go to sniff right, passing through center, but then snapping back in a ‘double-take’ at center. A move like that would break up the consistent rhythm, too.
And seeing this shot, I’m reminded of the shot before this. At the end of shot1, he’s standing up while looking straight. You might want to sync up these two shots by having him get up facing the direction he starts in this shot. Or even cut ‘during’ the standup or right before.
Your sketches of your model are looking a lot better! I can’t wait to see more.
PS. Ok, I know you havn’t thought _too_ much about it, but I think your squirrel needs a personality. Right now, he’s only ‘functioning’ but not in any particular way. Like, he doesn’t yet have a nervous tick or a character trait that makes him stand out. That kind of stuff you can’t just ‘pepper’ in later because a real personality determines how the character acts in any situation. Like a roadmap/guildines of action/reaction.
Ok, here comes the hard crits. >.<
It’s extremely cliche as it is not. He starts left, rainbows over the top to the right (deliberately NOT looking where he should) and magically sees his target ‘dead-ahead’.
You can make this even more interesting by changing his path, adding some noise and hesitations into it. I’d even suggest getting rid of the full movement on the right. IE, Have him sniff left then go to sniff right, passing through center, but then snapping back in a ‘double-take’ at center. A move like that would break up the consistent rhythm, too.
And seeing this shot, I’m reminded of the shot before this. At the end of shot1, he’s standing up while looking straight. You might want to sync up these two shots by having him get up facing the direction he starts in this shot. Or even cut ‘during’ the standup or right before.
Your sketches of your model are looking a lot better! I can’t wait to see more.
PS. Ok, I know you havn’t thought _too_ much about it, but I think your squirrel needs a personality. Right now, he’s only ‘functioning’ but not in any particular way. Like, he doesn’t yet have a nervous tick or a character trait that makes him stand out. That kind of stuff you can’t just ‘pepper’ in later because a real personality determines how the character acts in any situation. Like a roadmap/guildines of action/reaction.
Ok, I’m done. keep up the good work!